[創作] The Astronomer

看板poetry作者 (souffrance)時間14年前 (2010/09/14 22:03), 編輯推噓6(6012)
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英詩版首po 在這裡潛水很久,知道大家都很有才華啊> < 也看到好多我好喜歡的作品 我只是一個理工科系隱身在宅宅堆裡的小小男人婆, 從小是說台語和阿美族話的, 15歲之前完全不知道什麼較助動詞, 現在上了大學,沒有修過什麼課也沒讀過什麼理論, 只是很喜歡讀詩,也想磨磨自己的筆,希望大家可以大力鞭, 剛開始寫只覺得筆很不順,一切都很工, 希望以後筆能越磨越利!!!! I once knew an astronomer, a perfect model of decency, a curious drifter, a window lightened up high in the tower whose hometown’s a firefox icon of an island media He knows a proper place to put unbridled craze Continuing to hold onto his undimmed simplicity Hitching his winged chariot to a distant star He should not stay for a trodden ambition His flight turned into blue gems under the scarlet sky That shines the same an earth away tears subside, and I know there’s no way to be childish is there another way to make it matter another way to keep your breath close behind my scruff other than the only way it can be I had to fight off outside thoughts, other watching eyes I took the blows, shrugged off the chains In a way I thought he would apprize Under the same scarlet sky Toddling home amidst the dark I know the starlight does not suffice at the wasted corner of my silent reverie is there another way to make it matter another way to keep your breath close behind my scruff other than the only way it can be The dim light that seeps through the dome Makes me see what is not there Must I remember, still inhaling his presence He used to be here under the scarlet sky He used to be here before daylight He used to be here before daylight -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 220.132.89.123

09/14 22:32, , 1F
wonderful! :D Man, I love this one!
09/14 22:32, 1F

09/14 22:33, , 2F
妳是誰呀? :D 認識一下 :P
09/14 22:33, 2F

09/14 22:33, , 3F
寫得真好! 第一首嗎? 就寫得這麼好 :D
09/14 22:33, 3F

09/14 22:34, , 4F
我也是小時候都說台語的喔 ^^
09/14 22:34, 4F

09/14 22:45, , 5F
哇好開心,過獎了,這首詩的故事有興趣
09/14 22:45, 5F

09/14 22:45, , 6F
的人站內信給我吧,因為是自己的故事又
09/14 22:45, 6F

09/14 22:46, , 7F
不太敢公開怕被發現XD天球大我回你信喔
09/14 22:46, 7F

09/14 22:49, , 8F
天球大? XD 笑死我了 哈哈~
09/14 22:49, 8F

09/14 22:50, , 9F
最喜歡跟天文有關的詩了 ^^
09/14 22:50, 9F

09/15 00:50, , 10F
actually quite good!
09/15 00:50, 10F

09/15 09:29, , 11F
'tears subside'---i like that :)
09/15 09:29, 11F

09/15 10:29, , 12F
推 a perfect model of decency!
09/15 10:29, 12F

09/15 10:37, , 13F
推 his undimmed simplicity! :)
09/15 10:37, 13F

09/15 10:38, , 14F
such a genuine man per se! :D
09/15 10:38, 14F

09/15 10:44, , 15F
hi hahastarr,其實我最喜歡的是Ziva :P
09/15 10:44, 15F

09/15 10:54, , 16F
Tony Tony Tony Tony is the cutest lah
09/15 10:54, 16F

09/15 10:55, , 17F
=//=
09/15 10:55, 17F

09/16 07:39, , 18F
Good indeed
09/16 07:39, 18F
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